FIC: Green-eyed

[splix]

Title: Green-eyed
Author: Alex
Fandom: Lady Chatterley
Pairing/Character(s): Oliver Mellors/Clifford Chatterley.
Rating: R
Note: Written for the seans_50 final challenge.






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“Damn it, man, mind the bumps! I don’t want this thing getting stuck.”

“Sorry, your Lordship.”

Connie’s long, cool fingers closed over Clifford’s hand. “Calm down,
darling. He’s doing his best.”

“Is that so? It seems to me he’s deliberately rolling us over every
tussock – damn it all, Mellors!”

Struggling to push the tiny motorcar uphill, Mellors simply grunted.
Clifford listened to the man’s labored breaths and ground his teeth
in impotent wrath. He was no fool, far from it in point of fact, and
if the two of them wanted to play at Adam and Eve, that was their affair.

What cut was Mellors’ stony silence, as if that brief, shockingly
blissful period before the war had never happened, as if the two
of them had never clung together on sweltering summer nights in
the hut, bodies slippery with sweat; as if they’d never disported
themselves in the cool shadows of Wragby, as if Mellors’ hot, sweet
mouth had never worshiped Clifford’s manhood with a skill no woman
had ever been able to achieve.

Do yer like me then, yer Lordship?

He’d answer this time, if Mellors asked. He’d take back all those lofty
little taunts, every instance he’d pulled away when Mellors had inched
forward – but Mellors never asked again. Those eyes, green as a summer
lake, never met Clifford’s now.

Abruptly, Clifford snatched his hand from beneath Connie’s gentle touch.




End.

Comments

[shane-mayhem.livejournal.com]

ooh. Lovely. You paint such a clear picture with so few, well-chosen words.

Also, good news, paintings are almost done!

[splix.livejournal.com]

Oh, I'm glad you liked it!

I'd love to see the paintings if you can manage to get pics. :)

[kimberlite.livejournal.com]

Oh, tasty little twist there. ;)

[splix.livejournal.com]

Eee, thank you! :D

[stormatdusk.livejournal.com]

ooooo, very nice; didn't see that coming at all.

[splix.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much. :D

[hurinhouse.livejournal.com]

oh, sad for clifford - what great empathy you evoke. yet at the same time i'm pleased mellors moved on from someone so abusive. well done, thanks for sharing.

[splix.livejournal.com]

I felt equal measures of sympathy and irritation for Chatterley, so I'm pleased that came through - thank you. Of course I felt for Mellors - a true diamond in the rough. It's kind of a vexing film, and well, the book is kind of vexing too, I think. Thanks for the lovely feedback.

[mrkinch.livejournal.com]

You would have laughed at how far askance my gaze went when this appeared! But you show Clifford's terrible pride hurting him long before his present circumstances. I can't muster sympathy but definitely empathy. The central paragraph especially is a gem.

[splix.livejournal.com]

Heh. It's not the usual sort of pairing to be sure. But yes on Clifford's pride. I keep wondering if he'd be more or less of a jerk if he hadn't been so terribly wounded and I fail to come up with an answer. I'm delighted that the piece worked for you, and that you liked that paragraph. Thank you!

[govi20.livejournal.com]

OMG - that one came as a surprise! It's a brilliant idea and written brilliantly as always too.

It seems to me he’s deliberately rolling us over every tussock I think Sir Clifford is right there; Mellors would be like that, I bet.

The way Clifford's bitterness shines through every word, made me really feel for him for the first time. Love it!

[splix.livejournal.com]

Yay, I'm so glad you liked it! I love your Mellors/Viggo and wanted to write Mellors but didn't want to be all cheaty and use Viggo too. :)

Heh. I could definitely see Mellors nursing a grudge and digging at Clifford that way.

I'm happy that Clifford's bitterness was apparent, and that you felt for him. Thank you for the wonderful feedback!

[kittylass.livejournal.com]

Wow, you made me feel sympathy for Clifford! But then, how horrible it must be to know your wife enjoys the touch and affection you once received :(

Do yer like me then, yer Lordship?

Oh god... *swoons*

And I feel for Mellors too, how he sought out Clifford's affection (the way he does now with Connie) and it wasn't answered, and that it still stings. (Or, that's how I choose to see it *g*)

Thank you!

[splix.livejournal.com]

I'm actually surprised anyone felt bad for Clifford, because he really was kind of a wanker all round, but I did have a few moments of feeling sorry for him.

Oh god... *swoons*

Eee. :D

Yes, your interpretation is mine as well. *nods* Thank you so much, I'm thrilled that you enjoyed it. :D

[j-flattermann.livejournal.com]

I was thinking of this pairing as well, but would never have made it as perfect as you did.

Like this changing from one to the other and would like to see him change back to the Lord.

At least for one last time. hi hi ;) Maybe you could do that for me. *begs on her knees*

[splix.livejournal.com]

That's very kind of you - thank you! I wasn't planning to write more; think of it as a bonbon rather than a full meal. I'm so pleased you like it!

[j-flattermann.livejournal.com]

Sorry to hear, especially as I am so not into sweets. ;D

Check my version out if you like.

[mooms.livejournal.com]

This was a completely new take on Mellors. I had really never thought of him with Clifford, but you made me believe it! Brilliant idea beautifully done. Thank you.

[splix.livejournal.com]

I'm so happy it felt plausible, and that you liked it! Thanks so much, dear. :D

[alex-quine.livejournal.com]

That's a speaking little scene a-top a mountain of emotion and with an unexpected, quite poignant, twist. thanks for letting us read it.

[splix.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much. I really appreciate your very kind words.

[peersrogue.livejournal.com]

Good to know Clifford will spend the rest of his days dreaming of Mellors - just like the rest of us! Imagine turning down such an opportunity? Lovely, well written piece.

[splix.livejournal.com]

Clifford obviously doesn't know a good thing when he's got one. Typical upper-class twit. ;) I'm so glad you liked it - thank you for saying so.

[ms-ivory.livejournal.com]

Wow, the thought of Clifford and Mellors never even occured to me. Bravo! I could absolutely picture that little scene between them. My memory of the film is a bit blurry and that scene fits right in *grins*

[splix.livejournal.com]

I'm really glad you liked it! The movie's kind of annoying, except for the Sean bits of course. :D

[foxrafer.livejournal.com]

What an interesting spin on the story; it's great. I love how it makes your brain look at Lord Chatterley through an entirely different lens. Great piece.

[splix.livejournal.com]

Oh, thank you! I thought it would be a different perspective. I'm glad it worked!

[ingrid44.livejournal.com]

Lovely little story. Did Clifford really expect Mellors to be the same after he's been snubbed! How like Clifford to have 'put' Mellors back in 'his place.' Regrets it, does he? Want Mellors again eh? HA and HA again!

*evil grin* HA to Clifford! 'UP YOURS' (shouts Dennis Quaid in Independence Day)

[splix.livejournal.com]

You're one of the only ones who doesn't feel sorry for Clifford. Most refreshing. :D I did feel some measure of sympathy for him for his cluelessness if nothing else, but I don't think he deserves Mellors either. Thanks so much for commenting!

[ingrid44.livejournal.com]

Others felt sorry for Clifford? Why? The man is a prick - with a capital P!
Okay I'll give you clueless - but beyond that - no way. And he sat there watching Mellors while holding a woman's hand! Nope, NO SYMPATHY!

[caras-galadhon.livejournal.com]

Wow. I love the way this undercurrent of Clifford's tangled emotions feeds so perfectly into a simmering rage. An excellent snapshot. Really enjoyed it.

[splix.livejournal.com]

Thank you, thank you! I'm so glad the emotions worked that way for you. Much appreciated!